17A – Elevator Pitch No. 2
1) The pitch. https://youtu.be/tudBmUQfyHE
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
Not being boring is extremely important to me, I received a lot of criticism for sitting in my last pitch so I am standing and being more dynamic. This is valid, I was very clearly rehearsed and tense so it was kind of awkward to watch
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
I was standing and didn't over rehearse my pitch.
Hi, Tina. There are some things about this pitch that were better than the first one, like your posture and stance, but I think it could be better. I would take out the beginning (our teacher told us not to introduce ourselves) and instead add an engaging hook. Also, be careful not to say things that aren't true, like "plastic bags are almost obsolete" because many people still use them. Instead, maybe throw in some facts or statistics.
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